joey's belt - passing by

[stashy]

grade fertig geworden..^^ lasst alles raus was euch dazu einfällt

mfg marco


joey's belt - passing by

verse1
layin in my bed like
i would lay in chains
no need to get up today
cause nothing entertains
every single secound seems
to be a whole year
i would sell my lousy soul
to get out of here

bridge
there is nothing on tv
which brings some new to me
there is nothing left in my room
what could kill my boredom

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my life is passin by?

verse2
so many wasted hours
count them makes me sad
no one of my tears
could ever bring them back
people step in my to live
but they ain't here to stay
i' m tired to see dream after dream
just fadin away, fadin away

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my lifes passin by?

verse3
there were so many things
i realy liked to do
but now they seem so wrong
the same applies to you
and i missed that summers,
all the nights and the dreams
remember what this old man said
now understand what he means

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my lifes passin by?

 

[x-Riff]

Hi stashy,

dann will ich mal rauslassen:

joey’s belt – passing by

verse1
layin in my bed like
i would lay in chains finde ich schön
no need to get up today
cause nothing entertains
every single second seems
to be a whole year
i would sell my lousy soul
to get out of here evtl: just to get out of here

bridge
there is nothing on tv
which brings some new to me something new oder some news
there is nothing left in my room
what could kill my boredom that statt what imho

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my life is passin by? alternative: why can I lay here seeing my life passing by

verse2
so many wasted hours
count them makes me sad counting statt count imho
no one of my tears alternative: none of my shed tears
could ever bring them back
people step in my to live into statt in imho
but they ain’t here to stay
i' m tired to see dream after dream
just fadin away, fadin away

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my lifes passin by? siehe oben

verse3
there were so many things
i really liked to do
but now they seem so wrong
the same applies to you
and i missed that summers,
all the nights and the dreams
remember what this old man said
now I understand what he means ment statt means imho oder now I understand what it means (denn dann begreifst Du erst in der Jetztzeit, was er meinte).

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my lifes passin by? siehe oben

Tja - das Gefühl kennt wohl jede/r.
Ist jetzt nicht ein Text, der einem das auf eine völlig neue Art rüberbringt, neue Bilder benutzt oder so - aber es gibt wieder, was Du fühlst und das ist die Hauptsache erst mal, denke ich.

Hast Du schon Ideen zur musikalischen Umsetzung?
Ich meine außer Death metal oder so ...

x-Riff

 

[wilbour-cobb]

gefällt mir auch sehr gut der text, das gefühl kennt echt jeder, sehr gut umschrieben.

noch ein paar anmerkungen zu sprache:

Zitat von stashy
joey’s belt – passing by

verse1
layin in my bed like
i would lay in chains finde ich schön
no need to get up today
cause nothing entertains
every single second seems hier wäre auch noch ein "like" am satzende angepasst, "seems like" ist eigentlich die volle phrase
to be a whole year
i would sell my lousy soul
to get out of here evtl: just to get out of here

bridge
there is nothing on tv
which brings some new to me something new oder some news
there is nothing left in my room
what could kill my boredom that statt what imho "what" ist eigentlich ok, "which" wäre besser

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why? hier auch "asking", "myself" wird zusammengeschrieben
why can i lay here while my life is passin by? alternative: why can I lay here seeing my life passing by

verse2
so many wasted hours
count them makes me sad counting statt count imho jepp, ein muss sogar
no one of my tears alternative: none of my shed tears muss hier auch, "tears" ist ja mehrzahl
could ever bring them back
people step in my to live into statt in imho auch das ein muss
but they ain’t here to stay
i' m tired to see dream after dream
just fadin away, fadin away

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why? hier natürlich auch
why can i lay here while my lifes passin by? siehe oben

verse3
there were so many things
i really liked to do
but now they seem so wrong
the same applies to you
and i missed that summers, "these summers", ist mehrzahl, oder natürlich "that summer" einzahl
all the nights and the dreams
remember what this old man said
now I understand what he means ment statt means imho oder now I understand what it means (denn dann begreifst Du erst in der Jetztzeit, was er meinte).

refrain
so i keep layin here, ask my self why?
why can i lay here while my lifes passin by? siehe oben