Reviver

[Transistorkiller]

Never I lost my heart.
Once I gave it away.
(No one told me sadly) Sadly it was one way.
That day I sold my smile.
Years before mum took my happiness with every single slap in my face,
with every single scream she pelt at my heart, with every drip of blood I lost on the ground.

At the age of six my body got separated from my soul.
As my daddy decided to go, inhaling flue gas of his car to find his peace of mind.
I really hope he's doin' great wherever he is.
Maybe he's a bit proud of his son. Hopefully he is.
Ashamed I wish he didn't see me losing my way such often. Hope he was sleeping while I freaked out on chemicals and bottled poison.
Hope he didn't see those times his son gave up on life.

Never I lost my heart.
Once I threw it away.
Didn't realize it was one way.
Basting pieces of hearts I ripped out together to replace mine.
Appearing refused as a ghost. Trying to find my heart, I once gave away.
Didn't realize it was one way.

 

[bass-baer]

Die Struktur deines Songtextes ist schon ungewöhnlich:

Refrain1
Strophe 1
Refrain2

Die Refrains sind zweiteilig und unterscheiden sich im zweiten, längeren Teil ganz erheblich.
Insgesamt sind die Refrains ziemlich lang und die einzige Strophe ist so lang wie zwei.
Das kannst du bestimmt noch höhrbarer, konsumierbarer machen.


Refrain 1?
Never I lost my heart.
Once I gave it away.
(No one told me sadly)
Sadly it was one way.

That day I sold my smile.
Years before mum took my happiness
with every single slap in my face,
with every single scream
she pelt (shot?) at my heart,
with every drip of blood
I lost on the ground.

Strophe 1
At the age of six
my body got separated from my soul.
As my daddy decided to go
and inhale (ing) (the?) flue gas of his car
to find his peace of mind.
I really hope he's doin' great
wherever he is (may be?).

Maybe he's a bit proud of his son.
(And?) Hopefully he is.
Ashamed I wish he didn't see me
losing my way such (so?) often.
Hope he was sleeping
while I freaked out
on chemicals and bottled poison.
Hope he didn't see those times
his son gave up on life.

Refrain 2?
Never I lost my heart.
Once I threw it away.
Didn't realize it was one way.

Busting pieces of hearts I ripped out
together (to gather?) and (to?) replace mine.
Appearing refused as (like?) a ghost.
Trying to find my heart,
I once gave away.
Didn't realize it was one-way.

 

[Transistorkiller]

Ich teile meine Sachen ungern in bekannte Raster ein. Es sei denn, der Song verlangt es.
Ich mag dieses unkonventionelle. Deshalb find ich Wörter wie "konsumierbar" auch sehr gruselig