salty tear

[Bolacha Mole]

hallo,
ich möchte euch mal meinen ersten songtext zeigen.
Ich weiss das es schwierig ist ohne musik sowas zu beurteilen, aber naja ich bin über jede kritik offen
Der Text soll eine bittere erfahrung mit einem mädchen das ich am wochenende gemacht habe wiederspiegeln.
Achso, wenn da was im englischen falsch ist, dann sagt es mir, besser wäre das ich das dann berichtige

salty tear

I always ran away from Love
I never opened myself
I hid behind a wall, a big wall of distress
Afraid of disappointments
Afraid of break ups
I lived in a world where nothing keeps me in balance

They said a kiss can change everything
A kiss can give you life
But I was too afraid to live this dream called love

(refrain)
She’s going her way
She’s going her way
salty tear

I remember the day that changed everything
our first date mixed with different feelings
my legs where shakin like an earthquake
it was like in an romantic film
your were so beautiful
I couldn’t belive that you go out with me

(refrain)
She’s going her way
She’s going her way
salty tear

Its a kiss that change everything
we kissed the whole night
there were nothing that could stop us
everything I was afraid just died at midnight
we touched us everywhere
yeah we touched us
there were no secrets between us

I looked deep into your eyes
But from the moment to the next you changed
You said there is nothing more than a friendship

(refrain)
She’s going her way
She’s going her way
salty tear

 

[Bolacha Mole]

19 views und keine antwort
findet ihr ihn wirklich so schlecht

 

[Dreadd]

naja... wenn's dein erster songtext ist...
ich find's halt ein wenig kitschig und nicht sehr tiefsinnig.

 

[CrazyFrog]

Für den ersten Text net schlecht ^^