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bloodmandarin
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Selbe Bitte wie bei jedem in diesem Unterforum veröffentlichen Text. Einfach mal einen inhaltlich, grammatikalisch und stilistisch ausgerichteten Kommentar abgeben. Korrekturen ausdrücklich gestattet. In der dritten Strophe bitte jeweils eine der beiden Varianten als gelungener deklarieren. Danke!
Sometimes in the lonesome hide
of darkness, of the night
I wish someone, who clears my mind
to let me see, from love I'm blind
To free me from my suffering
to give her breath, end suffocating
Maybe we've shared some gorgeous moments
but it seems they're dominating lowlands
All I want is set her free
from pressure her eternally/from pressure for eternity
to reach the aim of /the only way is to leave her be
I have to kill my memory
Without a cut, cannot forget
forget her face, her kiss, her lips
without erase, I can't give up
to miss, like, think, I cannot stop
But I know that it will hurt
in my heart like from the start
I never've known how much to give
how much except, how much let live
I cannot handle distances
cannot assess her glances
Should I touch or let her be?
Let silence be my destiny?
I'm afraid of pain and ache
I prefer to lose my mind
If I lose it for her sake
pull them out, outside them bind
Refrain:
If you love, you must let go
If you love, allow her to be free
If you love, not always show
If you love, you must let go
If you love, allow her to be free
cause too much, too much love robs liberty
Sometimes in the lonesome hide
of darkness, of the night
I wish someone, who clears my mind
to let me see, from love I'm blind
To free me from my suffering
to give her breath, end suffocating
Maybe we've shared some gorgeous moments
but it seems they're dominating lowlands
All I want is set her free
from pressure her eternally/from pressure for eternity
to reach the aim of /the only way is to leave her be
I have to kill my memory
Without a cut, cannot forget
forget her face, her kiss, her lips
without erase, I can't give up
to miss, like, think, I cannot stop
But I know that it will hurt
in my heart like from the start
I never've known how much to give
how much except, how much let live
I cannot handle distances
cannot assess her glances
Should I touch or let her be?
Let silence be my destiny?
I'm afraid of pain and ache
I prefer to lose my mind
If I lose it for her sake
pull them out, outside them bind
Refrain:
If you love, you must let go
If you love, allow her to be free
If you love, not always show
If you love, you must let go
If you love, allow her to be free
cause too much, too much love robs liberty
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