D.T.-Im' swanging but no banging

von Flowar, 17.03.07.

  1. Flowar

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    ich hoffe ihr werdet den bewerten..ich glaube diesmal das viele fehler dabei sind wenn ich erlich bin aba schaut es euh bitte mal an

    [Strophe]
    “Its over! I’m done with you”, that were the last words, wich came out of your mouth-
    you was thinking that I’ll ruin the whole relationship, that it will be like a drouth-
    no love, no nothing, no that you want and what you are really need-
    at the beginn , it was fly, you was like a candy,I had a so great treat-
    but then a shock, youre thoughts are going crazy-
    why I should have fuck an another girl baby?-
    many people were and get hurt but I never was doing something that’s wrong-
    I never called you shit-
    And I never said “you are smelling not good?Fuck!You are pong!”-
    I can sing you some songs, from here the S-Town to Hong Kong-
    When I start to rap, tremble the ground like I am the big King Kong-
    Ok but now back to the real thing, to this one girl-
    She was telling me something, and her feelings got hurt-
    Promise me, Im not like a player and hadn’t a infidelity-
    I neva was inna bordel and Im just a friend of that girl and not her freer-
    Dont believe that what other people are saying, who cares that?-
    You?-
    So your last decision is that its over...ok if you say that it will be true-

    [Hook]2x

    Yeah yeah I was there and I was swanging-
    But I never was was was there to banging-
    Yeah Give me a ride and I’ll swanging-
    But I’m not not not here to banging-

    [Strophe]

    You wont go out of my head, I am feeling so lonely-
    The only one who cares how I feel is my homy-
    but I’m not a bitch, after the division I wasn’t crying like a motherfuckin wussy-
    I was still representing the man who I am with two hoes in a jacuzzi-
    But that doesn’t mean that I have forget you-
    Because you was the one who has bought me this jacuzzi tub-
    So in this thing are my thoughts of you and still those two bitches-
    I was crocked as I invite them to my house, my attitude was like that of some snitches-
    Ok for sure I have to appolagize my attitude, but you too!-
    If you wont to that, my bullet will come through you!-
    I dont care who will find you when you are dead-
    If the police,FBI, fuck it you was making me mad-
    And damn I wasn’t happy in the mom as I was shooting you down-
    But you havn’t gave me an another resort, cause you was treating me like a clown-
    So its done, you’re not more on this world and nobody knows whos the killer-
    But I can feel that something is away, I dont feel any more like a big gorilla-

    [Hook]2x

    Yeah yeah i was there and I was swanging-
    But i never was was was there to banging-
    Yeah Give me a ride and I’ll swanging-
    But I’m not not not here to banging-
     
  2. wilbour-cobb

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    Erstellt: 18.03.07   #2


    jepp, stimmt, is ne menge falsch. dein hauptproblem ist, dass du die satzstellung deinem reim zuliebe umbaust, was im englischen fast unmöglich ist. die satzstellung ist sehr streng. keine ahnung, wie deine kollegen das im rap-gewerbe handhaben, ich gehe jetzt einfach mal von der höchstmöglichen richtigkeit aus, du kannst ja überlegen, was du davon übernimmst. du mischt auch heitere slang wörter, deren bedeutung du kennst, mit wörtern deren bedeutung du scheinbar nicht kennst.

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  3. Flowar

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    Erstellt: 21.03.07   #3
    ich hab schon selbst gemerkt das ich mich mit diesem text zeimlich verschlechtert hab trotzdem danke!
     
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