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[TRommelman]

Hi
Hier wiedermal 2 Texte. Einer ist komplett neu und einen hatte ich schonmal gepostet und jetzt ein bisserl aufgepimpt.

You might be beautiful
But you're gormless
Come on leave now
I got better things to do

But you stay here
Just talking shit to me
The only thing you know
Is how to look good

Refrain:
you're just wasted time
you got nothing to say

Bridge:
Leave me alone
or shut up and be pretty


Everything you say
Doesn't matter to me
I don't care about
Anything you do

I don't hate you
Neither I like you
I don't know why
you are talking to me

Bridge:
Leave me alone
or shut up and be pretty



Text 2:

Just Words


Just Words
Spoken with a mouthful of Anger
Just Words
Crashing right into the head


Bridge:
Frustration
Gossip going around
Affliction
Gossip going around

Refrain:
Doesn't matter what they say
Doesn't matter what they do
You only have to say:
FUCK YOU!!

Just Words
Don't wanna hear em
Just Words
Cutting deeply

Refrain:
Doesn't matter what they say
Doesn't matter what they do
all you have to say:
FUCK YOU!! X2

Bridge:
Frustration
Gossip going around
Affliction
Gossip going around

Schlusspart:
You don't need them
So don't take care about them
Live your life now
You got true friends here

 

[TRommelman]

Sinnentleerter Tanzsong ftw.!

Come on dance now
Show me how
Your hips are swingin

Come on dance now
Don't let your
Feet stop moving

Come on dance now
I will see
Your body shaking

Come on dance now
You got to
Feel the beat

Bridge
Yeah yeah yeah x4

Refrain
You got to dance
Cause this a dance song x2

Bridge
Yeah yeah yeah x4

 

[desgraca]

You might be beautiful
But you’re gormless
gorm-was? achso,,,,,britisch
Come on leave now
I got better things to do

But you stay here
Just talking shit to me
The only thing you can
the only thing you're able to
Is look good
oder auch: the only thing you know is how to look good
das "can" kann nicht alleine stehen.
Refrain:
you’re just wasted time
you got nothing to say

Bridge:
Leave me alone
or shut up and be pretty


Everything you say
Doesn’t matter for me
-for+to
I don’t care for
-for +about
Anything you do

I don’t hate you
Neither I like you
nor do i like you
I don’t know why
you are talking to me

Bridge:
Leave me alone
or shut up and be pretty

das mal zum ersten song vom englischen her. ich mach mal weiter und hoffe das nexte ist dann kein über-jemanden-herzieh-thema

 

[desgraca]

text2:

Just Words


Just Words
Spoken with a mouthful of Anger
Just Words
Crashing right into the head


Bridge:
Frustration
Gossip going around
Affliction
Gossip going around

Refrain:
Doesn’t matter what they say
Doesn’t matter what they do
You only have to say:
evtl: all you have to say is
FUCK YOU!!

Just Words
Don’t wanna hear em
Just Words
Cutting deeply

Refrain:
Doesn’t matter what they say
Doesn’t matter what they do
You only have to say:
FUCK YOU!! X2

Bridge:
Frustration
Gossip going around
Affliction
Gossip going around

Schlusspart:
You don’t need them
So don’t take care about them
Live your life now
You got real friends here
besser true statt real, also....true friends sind echte/wahre freunde, real friends sind reale freunde (im kontrast zu imaginären freunden)

okay, das ist thematisch schonmal ne verbesserung

 

[desgraca]

Sinnentleerter Tanzsong ftw.!

Come on dance now
Show me how
Your hips are swinging
can swing

Come on dance now
Don’t let your
Feet stop moving

Come on dance now
I will see
Your body shaking

Come on dance now
You got to
Feel the beat

Bridge
Yeah yeah yeah x4

Refrain
You got to dance
Cause this a dance song x2

Bridge
Yeah yeah yeah x4
________________

ähm ja soviel von mir

 

[TRommelman]

Geändert.

Keine Meinung zu den Texten?

 

[TRommelman]

Mir gefällt jetzt irgendwie der Refrain des 2 Textes nicht mehr....

Kann mir einer helfen?

 

[desgraca]

mach den schlusspart zum refrain? der ist gut

 

[TRommelman]

mach den schlusspart zum refrain? der ist gut

Ich weiß nich....
Bin irgendwie nich der Meinung dass er zum Refrain taugt...

 

[TRommelman]

Mehr Feedback?

 

[TRommelman]

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Vorschlag Refrain 2ter Text:

You got to dance
cause your body moves
You got to dance
cause the rhythm grooves

What should I say?
Über das Englische ist nate drüber gegangen und der Inhalt steht, so weit Inhalt da ist.

Ist jetzt nicht negativ gemeint, aber z.B. erster Text: kennst Du "get off off my clouds" von den Stones oder "under my thumb"? Alles nicht umwerfende Themen aber irgendwie jeweils ein prima Bild, rotzige Ausdrücke und gut ist.

Funzen halt als Texte für Hard Rock und gut ist, denke ich mal.

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