4 Songs von mir....

[Libertines]

Born Insights


Hey now! What are you singing?
Sing about my life.
Hey now! What are you thinking?
Think about your life.

Hey now! Come on, let´s fly!
Fly till the sky.
Hey now! Come on, get high!
There´s no need to cry.


You are the devil.
You are the sin.
You´re at the best level.
You are my spin

Hey now! What do you hear?
Possibly the fear.
Hey now! Why this tears?
You cried for years.

Hey now! Do you know what i mean?
You are my queen.
Hey now! It´s all a dream.
So, why are you scream?


You are the devil.
You are the sin.
You´re at the best level.
You are my spin.


Don´t believe in me, but you will see,
The thing inside my head, which is rock until your dead.


You are the devil.
You are the sin.
You´re at the best level.
You are my spin


Don´t believe in me, but you will see,
The thing inside my head, which is rock until your dead.




Grün - Verse
Blau - Bridge
Rot - Chorus

 

[Libertines]

Drugstore


They don´t know, what the sky is singing,
they don´t know, what tomorrow is bringing.
They won´t show, the fears which are misgiven,
and they won´t go, the way who is for livin.


_________ But_______ do they ____know,
_________ the time____they have__ to go?


They don´t know, why the air is breathing.
they don´t know, that the drugs are leaving.
They won´t show, the dreams that they are dreaming,
and they won´t go, at the day of defeating.


_________ But_______ do they ____know,
_________ the time____they have__ to go?


The drugs _____ don´t work.
The drugs _____ don´t work.
The drugs _____ don´t work.
The drugs _____ don´t work.

They don´t know, what the sky is singing,
they don´t know, what tomorrow is bringing.
They won´t show, the fears which are misgiven,
and they won´t go, the way who is for livin.


_________ But_______ do they ____know,
_________ the time____they have__ to go?


The drugs _____ don´t work.
The drugs _____ don´t work.
The drugs _____ don´t work.
The drugs _____ don´t work.

 

[gitarrensüchtler]

Teilweise sehr tiefsinning aber alles in allem nicht schlecht.
Bei ersten Text am Anfang müsste es da nicht "What are you singing?" heißen und nicht "What are you sing?"

 

[Libertines]

Shine the time


I´m lost alone in a nightmare,
so far away from my home.
I want to break through that night there,
so I can search for my own.

I´m trying to find all the answers,
that the whole mankind see.
I don´t know the questions,
so I´m better let it be.

_____But there is a star,
upon in the sky,
I just see him clear.


Cum on, let it shine, the time of my life,
I dont want to be, like you used to be.
So why do you think all the time of me?

Cum on, let it shine, the time of my life,
I dont want to be, like you used to be.
Why aren´t you just ignoring me?


I´m lost alone in a nightmare,
so far away from her home.
I want to break through that night there,
so I can search for my own.


I´m trying to find all the answers,
that the whole mankind see.
I don´t know the questions,
so I´m gonna let it be.


_____But there is a star,
Upon in the sky,
I just see him clear.


Cum on, let it shine, the time of my life,
I dont want to be, like you want me to be.
So why do you think all the time of me?

Cum on, let it shine, the rest of my life,
I dont want to be, like you used to be.
Why aren´t you just ignoring me?

Cum on, let it shine, the time of my life,
I dont want to be, like you used to be.
Why aren´t you just ignoring me?

 

[Horschig]

also erstma...
4 songs? ich seh nur einen

ok jetz zu dem

sprachlich:
wie lange sprichst du schon englisch? 2-3 jahre? grammatikalisch sind da n paar fehler, ich werd nachher, wenn du hier geantwortet hast, die fehler mal aufschreiben, wenn du willst
ansonsten wirken die reimen irgendwie teilweise so gezwungen, bzw es sind irgendwie so standardreime, in meinen augen auf jeden fall... liegt vll auch an dem wenig verschiedenen formulierungen

inhaltlich:
eigtl ok, vll, wenn das sprachlich etwas besser wär, könnte man die botschaft noch ein wenig besser rüberbringen, aber in anbetracht dessen is das schon ganz ok

edith sagt, ich hab zu langsam geschrieben
kriitk geht um borns insight, also den ersten text

is das schon für ne musikrichtung gedacht?
vom text/aufbau her erinnert mich das an so poppunk

 

[Libertines]

Teilweise sehr tiefsinning aber alles in allem nicht schlecht.
Bei ersten Text am Anfang müsste es da nicht "What are you singing?" heißen und nicht "What are you sing?"

mhh.. alle grammatikalischen und rechtsschreiblichen fehler sind gewollt...

Edit: den 4. finde ich nicht mehr...

 

[Libertines]

is das schon für ne musikrichtung gedacht?
vom text/aufbau her erinnert mich das an so poppunk

Richtung - pop/rock/brit-pop....


bei dem 1. sind aber wirklich ganz schön viele fehler... peinlich...