A little request

von bastinho, 29.07.08.

  1. bastinho

    bastinho Registrierter Benutzer

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    Hi noch mal ein neuer songtext. bitte beurteilen, verbessern ...

    P/S: Die dinge die genannt werden die den erzähler nicht interessieren die sind ein wenig schwach, ist mir aber nichts besseres eingefallen was sich reimt und das soll sich halt reimen, vielleicht habt ihr ja bessere ideen (wär nett)

    A little request

    When people try to break their own legs,
    when people try to survive in rags,
    when people try to doff each other,
    when people try to capture a lover,

    Chorus: Then I just say, I coudn´t care less,
    what other people do, don´t produce interest,
    I just want that they leave me alone,
    and that my phone play the busy tone.

    When people try to become famous,
    when people try to make persons agamous,
    when people try to be bone idle,
    when people try to began to sidle,

    Chorus: Then I just say, I coudn´t care less,
    what other people do, don´t produce interest,
    I just want that they leave me alone,
    and that my phone plays the busy tone.

    I haven´t lots of requirements,
    it is too a tall order?,
    that I just want to be alone,
    in my little quarter,
    yeah I´m so happy they let me alone!!!
    and my phone continues playing the busy tone.
     
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    x-Riff Helpful & Friendly User HFU

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    Erstellt: 29.07.08   #2
    Auch hier mal so ne Art quick-check:

    A little request

    When people try to break their own legs,
    when people try to survive in rags,
    when people try to doff each other,
    when people try to capture a lover,

    Chorus: Then I just say, I coudn´t care less,
    what other people do, don´t produce interest,
    I just want that they leave me alone,
    I (just) want them to leave me alone
    and that my phone play the busy tone.
    and my phone played/will play the busy tone

    When people try to become famous,
    when people try to make persons agamous,
    others statt people?
    when people try to be bone idle,
    when people try to began to sidle,
    try to began geht gar nicht ... try to begin - besser lass das try to weg oder nimm: when people do begin to sidle

    Chorus: Then I just say, I coudn´t care less,
    what other people do, don´t produce interest,
    I just want that they leave me alone,
    and that my phone plays the busy tone.

    I haven´t lots of requirements,
    it is too a tall order?,
    is it
    that I just want to be alone,
    versuch mal: asking to be left alone
    in my little quarter,
    yeah I´m so happy they let me alone!!!
    to be left alone oder if you left me alone
    and my phone continues playing the busy tone
    continues to play, imho


    Sollte vollkommen als gutes Fundament für einen songtext auf eine bestehende Musik reichen - der Rest dann später ...

    ... und dann mal good luck tomorrow ...

    x-riff
     
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    Erstellt: 29.07.08   #3
    jo danke
     
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