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[smithy]

Guten Morgen miteinender,

das ist der Songtext des ersten Liedes unserer Band doch bevor wir ans Aufnehmen denken können oder uns trauen den irgendwo mal live zu spielen wollte ich mal von euch hörn wie ihr ihn findet
Wenn jemand krasse Grammatik- und/oder Rechtschreibfehler findet wäre das natürlich auch echt wichtig
also hier nun der Text:

No Wonder


This scene is versant
it’s all around
the world’s in motion
hectic and loud
everyone’s running
no place to breath
I make may way through
this crowded streets

and suddenly there stands a man in front of me
declaring things of his own philosophy
he actually seems pretty wise and versed to me
but what he says worries me he says

Oh its no wonder that we’re falling apart, no
we’re falling apart
it all falls apart
if things won’t change than the trouble goes on, yes
the trouble goes on
it all will go on

this scene is versant
go look outside
we’ve to come up to
what is desired
stay calm and covered in
pinstripe-suit
the headlines lead while
they keep us mute

and suddenly there stands this man in front of me
one of a few with his own identity
he actually seems pretty wise and versed to me
but what he says worries me he says

Oh its no wonder that we’re falling apart, no
we’re falling apart
it all falls apart
if things won’t change than the trouble goes on, yes
the trouble goes on
it all will go on

 

[smithy]

kommt schon Leute
wäre echt für jede Hilfe dankbar