[metalcore] ein weiterer von mir [titellos]

[dave1]

Another day is fading out
And I'm sitting in my backyard
the sun is going under while the moon is rising
And I truly know this was the last day the sun went out
I'll rewrite history, changing of lives, changing of hearts
retrospective on friends who never were
Their lifestyle was never covered with glory
but this time I'll rewrite their story another time…
With my pen in hand and a red spiral notebook on my lap
I'm going to play god, only for this night
it doesn't look like a special pen, its ordinary white
but the magic begins when I touch it to paper

Chorus:
Well take care of the shadows
I'll be waiting in the dark
You may be tired but guess? I'm not
My knife is blank as bank as you are
No screams my dear I'll slit your throat
And drink your blood
You may be scared but guess?
You make me so hot

When the moon is upon his highest shine
And the grass is glistening with the dew
I'll come for you
When the bright moonshine becomes strange
A touch of red is shining through your eyes
And you know, it's your blood reflecting in the air
and there are no subjects to change, once again!!!

Chorus

When my story written with the pen of pain
Turns into darkness pining away with the light
I take sense of your blood
Like a wolf I'm creeping around you
And I know there's no fire left which makes you strong
You know that I won't restrain my nature
I'm here to show teeth
I'm here to make the brightest light turn black

Chorus

Oh you feel it gripping around your throat
This feeling is never ending!
Oh!

 

[PaulaBass]

Liest sich wirklich gut. Gelungener Text würd ich mal sagen.
Mfg PaulaBass

 

[third_eye]

Another day is fading out
And I'm sitting in my backyard
the sun is going down while the moon is rising (die Sonne geht unter ist going down)
And I truly know this was the last day the sun went out
I'll rewrite history, changing of lives, changing of hearts
retrospective on friends who never were
Their lifestyle was never covered with glory
but this time I'll rewrite their story another time… (das another time liest sich irgendwie fehl am Platz)
With my pen in hand and a red spiral notebook on my lap
I'm going to play god, only for this night
it doesn't look like a special pen, its ordinary white
but the magic begins when it touches paper (klingt imho besser)

Chorus:
Well take care of the shadows
I'll be waiting in the dark
You may be tired but guess? I'm not
My knife is blank as bank as you are
No screams my dear I'll slit your throat
And drink your blood
You may be scared but guess?
You make me so hot

When the moon is upon his highest shine
And the grass is glistening with the dew
I'll come for you
When the bright moonshine becomes strange
A touch of red is shining through your eyes
And you know, it's your blood reflecting in the air
and once again there are no subjects to change. (das once again muss vorgezogen werden)

Chorus

When my story written with the pen of pain
Turns into darkness pining away with the light
I take sense of your blood
Like a wolf I'm creeping around you
And I know there's no fire left which makes you strong
You know that I won't restrain my nature
I'm here to show teeth
I'm here to make the brightest light turn black

Chorus

Oh you feel it gripping around your throat
This feeling is never ending!
Oh!

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Teilweise schöner Text, nur verstehe ich nicht, warum du den eher abstrakten und poetischen Ansatz aus den Strophen im Refrain so furchtbar platt und langweilig umsetzt. Aber wie gesagt, schöne Strophen

 

[dave1]

Another day is fading out
while I bury hopes in my backyard
the sun is going down oh how ordinary
but I truly know this was the last time I've ever seen it
rewriting history, changing a life, slaying of hearts
focused on friends what they've never been
everything present in their live except success it seems
but now I play god and write the plot by myself
With this pen in my hand the book of life in my lap
I'm going to play god, only for this night
this may not be special a desperate boy
but the magic starts when I touch the paper

Chorus:
Well take care of the shadows
I'll be waiting in the dark
You may be tired but guess? I'm not
My knife is blank as bank as you are
No screams my dear I'll slit your throat
And drink your blood
You may be scared but guess?
You make me so hot

When the moon is upon his highest shine
And the grass is glistening with the dew
I'll come for you
When the bright moonshine becomes strange
A touch of red is shining through your eyes
And you know, it's your blood reflecting in the air
Once again, there are no subjects to change,
Chorus

When my story written with the pen of pain
Turns into darkness pining away with the light
I take sense of your blood
Like a wolf I'm creeping around you
And I know there's no fire left which makes you strong
You know that I won't restrain my nature
I'm here to show teeth
I'm here to make the brightest light turn black

Chorus

Oh you feel it gripping around your throat
This feeling is never ending!
Oh!