[metalcore] ein weiterer von mir [titellos]

von dave1, 17.04.08.

  1. dave1

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    Another day is fading out
    And I'm sitting in my backyard
    the sun is going under while the moon is rising
    And I truly know this was the last day the sun went out
    I'll rewrite history, changing of lives, changing of hearts
    retrospective on friends who never were
    Their lifestyle was never covered with glory
    but this time I'll rewrite their story another time…
    With my pen in hand and a red spiral notebook on my lap
    I'm going to play god, only for this night
    it doesn't look like a special pen, its ordinary white
    but the magic begins when I touch it to paper

    Chorus:
    Well take care of the shadows
    I'll be waiting in the dark
    You may be tired but guess? I'm not
    My knife is blank as bank as you are
    No screams my dear I'll slit your throat
    And drink your blood
    You may be scared but guess?
    You make me so hot

    When the moon is upon his highest shine
    And the grass is glistening with the dew
    I'll come for you
    When the bright moonshine becomes strange
    A touch of red is shining through your eyes
    And you know, it's your blood reflecting in the air
    and there are no subjects to change, once again!!!

    Chorus

    When my story written with the pen of pain
    Turns into darkness pining away with the light
    I take sense of your blood
    Like a wolf I'm creeping around you
    And I know there's no fire left which makes you strong
    You know that I won't restrain my nature
    I'm here to show teeth
    I'm here to make the brightest light turn black

    Chorus

    Oh you feel it gripping around your throat
    This feeling is never ending!
    Oh!
     
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    Liest sich wirklich gut. Gelungener Text würd ich mal sagen.
    Mfg PaulaBass
     
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    Another day is fading out
    And I'm sitting in my backyard
    the sun is going down while the moon is rising (die Sonne geht unter ist going down)
    And I truly know this was the last day the sun went out
    I'll rewrite history, changing of lives, changing of hearts
    retrospective on friends who never were
    Their lifestyle was never covered with glory
    but this time I'll rewrite their story another time… (das another time liest sich irgendwie fehl am Platz)
    With my pen in hand and a red spiral notebook on my lap
    I'm going to play god, only for this night
    it doesn't look like a special pen, its ordinary white
    but the magic begins when it touches paper (klingt imho besser)

    Chorus:
    Well take care of the shadows
    I'll be waiting in the dark
    You may be tired but guess? I'm not
    My knife is blank as bank as you are
    No screams my dear I'll slit your throat
    And drink your blood
    You may be scared but guess?
    You make me so hot

    When the moon is upon his highest shine
    And the grass is glistening with the dew
    I'll come for you
    When the bright moonshine becomes strange
    A touch of red is shining through your eyes
    And you know, it's your blood reflecting in the air
    and once again there are no subjects to change. (das once again muss vorgezogen werden)

    Chorus

    When my story written with the pen of pain
    Turns into darkness pining away with the light
    I take sense of your blood
    Like a wolf I'm creeping around you
    And I know there's no fire left which makes you strong
    You know that I won't restrain my nature
    I'm here to show teeth
    I'm here to make the brightest light turn black

    Chorus

    Oh you feel it gripping around your throat
    This feeling is never ending!
    Oh!

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    Teilweise schöner Text, nur verstehe ich nicht, warum du den eher abstrakten und poetischen Ansatz aus den Strophen im Refrain so furchtbar platt und langweilig umsetzt. Aber wie gesagt, schöne Strophen :D
     
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    Erstellt: 23.04.08   #4
    Another day is fading out
    while I bury hopes in my backyard
    the sun is going down oh how ordinary
    but I truly know this was the last time I've ever seen it
    rewriting history, changing a life, slaying of hearts
    focused on friends what they've never been
    everything present in their live except success it seems
    but now I play god and write the plot by myself
    With this pen in my hand the book of life in my lap
    I'm going to play god, only for this night
    this may not be special a desperate boy
    but the magic starts when I touch the paper

    Chorus:
    Well take care of the shadows
    I'll be waiting in the dark
    You may be tired but guess? I'm not
    My knife is blank as bank as you are
    No screams my dear I'll slit your throat
    And drink your blood
    You may be scared but guess?
    You make me so hot

    When the moon is upon his highest shine
    And the grass is glistening with the dew
    I'll come for you
    When the bright moonshine becomes strange
    A touch of red is shining through your eyes
    And you know, it's your blood reflecting in the air
    Once again, there are no subjects to change,
    Chorus

    When my story written with the pen of pain
    Turns into darkness pining away with the light
    I take sense of your blood
    Like a wolf I'm creeping around you
    And I know there's no fire left which makes you strong
    You know that I won't restrain my nature
    I'm here to show teeth
    I'm here to make the brightest light turn black

    Chorus

    Oh you feel it gripping around your throat
    This feeling is never ending!
    Oh!
     
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