noch ein kleiner song / korrekturlesen und kritik erwünscht

[dave1]

mistakes, never became forgotten
feelings may ascend
but mine hit the bottom
was it your love, i've gotten?
tried to fly
but kept on the bottom

but i think you know!

that my world was never revolvin' around you
hearts changed but I never cared about lovin' you

displace, my heart, it's broken
you never dug till' the end
let me lovin' you
let me suffer
can't you see?
the pain that hides inside me

never say die,
show me your face
i don't keep on missin you, anymore
i'm keen on things, you could never show
now i don't need it anymore
anymore..


--

...now, i only want to let you know...

my dreams were never dreamin' about you
my mind never pressed to see you

 

[desgraca]

mistakes, never became forgotten
normal wäre hier "never forgotten"
feelings may ascend
but mine hit the bottom
was it your love, i've gotten?
das find ich total seltsam, "was it your love i received" oder so, ich weiß, das reimt sich nichso wirklich
tried to fly
but kept on the bottom
stayed statt kept

but i think you know!

that my world was never revolvin' around you
hearts changed but I never cared about lovin' you
ich habe mich nie darum geschert dich zu lieben?
displace, my heart, it's broken
was soll das "displace" hier heißen? steht da für mich ziemlich einsam
you never dug till' the end
let me lovin' you
love you
let me suffer
can't you see?
the pain that hides inside me
the pain hiding inside me

never say die,
show me your face
i don't keep on missin you, anymore
i won't
i'm keen on things you could never show
now i don't need it anymore
them anymore
anymore..


--

...now, i only want to let you know...

my dreams were never dreamin' about you
meine träume träumten nie von dir?
my mind never pressed to see you