I don't miss you at all

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Hallo,

ich hatte gerade meine kreativen 5 minuten und habe einen Song geschrieben.
Würde gerne mal wissen was ihr von ihm haltet!
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Well I choose not to recall
all that memoires that are still in my mind
I'd better take a drink or two
with my friends in a bar to pass the time

I don't know what I'll become some day
But I'm sure it's going to be fine
So i better go out drinking
instead of wasting time by thinking
about you


And then I woke up this morning
with a girl whose name I don't recall
That's the life I wanted
And I'm sure that I don't miss you at all

I don't know what I'll become some day
But I'm sure it's going to be fine
So i better go out drinking
instead of wasting time by thinking
about you

And now I'm sitting in the parlor
had to much alcohol last night
and as I sit I realize
I wish you now were on my side

I don't expect you to come back
but still I wish that you would do
So I get up to wild the parties
to avoid my thoughts of you

I don't know what I'll become some day
But I'm sure it's going to be fine
So i better go out drinking
instead of wasting time by thinking
about you
 
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Well I choose not to recall
all the memoires still in my mind ("that are" brauchts nicht, kann man über Betonung lösen)
I'd better have a drink or two
with my friends in a bar to pass the time

I don't know what I'll become some day
But I'm sure it's going to be fine
So i better go out drinking
instead of wasting time by thinking
about you[/B]

And then I woke up this morning
with a girl whose name I couldn't recall (klingt imo besser)
That's the life I wanted
And I'm sure that I don't miss you at all

I don't know what I'll become some day
But I'm sure it's going to be fine
So i better go out drinking
instead of wasting time by thinking
about you


And now I'm sitting in the parlor
had to much alcohol last night
and as I sit I realize
I wish you now were by my side

I don't expect you to come back
but still I wish that you would do
So I get up to wild the parties
to avoid my thoughts of you

I don't know what I'll become some day
But I'm sure it's going to be fine
So i better go out drinking
instead of wasting time by thinking
about you


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Das hab ich jetzt auf die Schnelle gefunden, ansonsten find ich den Text sehr schön. Wie wirds denn musikalisch werden?
 
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And now I'm sitting in the parlor
had too much alcohol last night
and as I sit I realize
I wish you now were by my side
i wish you were by my side ,,,,,,ich wuerd das now einfach rausstreichen, denn ansonsten muesste es nach hinten "i wish you were by my side"

I don't expect you to come back
but still I wish that you would do
ohne "do"...eigentlich auch ohne "that"
So I get up to wild the parties
to avoid my thoughts of you
hier waere escape besser als avoid

ansonsten schliess ich mich meinungstechnisch an, ich finds auch gut
 
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Vielen Dank für die Antworten und Verbesserungsvorschläge! :)

Musikalisch hatte ich es mir ein bisschen schwungvoll und nur in Begleitung einer Akustik-Gitarre vorgestellt. Werds wohl heute mal aufnehmen und aufladen!

Gruß
 

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