I don't miss you at all

von Knallekalle, 26.03.08.

  1. Knallekalle

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    Erstellt: 26.03.08   #1
    Hallo,

    ich hatte gerade meine kreativen 5 minuten und habe einen Song geschrieben.
    Würde gerne mal wissen was ihr von ihm haltet!
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    Well I choose not to recall
    all that memoires that are still in my mind
    I'd better take a drink or two
    with my friends in a bar to pass the time

    I don't know what I'll become some day
    But I'm sure it's going to be fine
    So i better go out drinking
    instead of wasting time by thinking
    about you


    And then I woke up this morning
    with a girl whose name I don't recall
    That's the life I wanted
    And I'm sure that I don't miss you at all

    I don't know what I'll become some day
    But I'm sure it's going to be fine
    So i better go out drinking
    instead of wasting time by thinking
    about you

    And now I'm sitting in the parlor
    had to much alcohol last night
    and as I sit I realize
    I wish you now were on my side

    I don't expect you to come back
    but still I wish that you would do
    So I get up to wild the parties
    to avoid my thoughts of you

    I don't know what I'll become some day
    But I'm sure it's going to be fine
    So i better go out drinking
    instead of wasting time by thinking
    about you
     
  2. third_eye

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    Erstellt: 26.03.08   #2
    Well I choose not to recall
    all the memoires still in my mind ("that are" brauchts nicht, kann man über Betonung lösen)
    I'd better have a drink or two
    with my friends in a bar to pass the time

    I don't know what I'll become some day
    But I'm sure it's going to be fine
    So i better go out drinking
    instead of wasting time by thinking
    about you[/B]

    And then I woke up this morning
    with a girl whose name I couldn't recall (klingt imo besser)
    That's the life I wanted
    And I'm sure that I don't miss you at all

    I don't know what I'll become some day
    But I'm sure it's going to be fine
    So i better go out drinking
    instead of wasting time by thinking
    about you


    And now I'm sitting in the parlor
    had to much alcohol last night
    and as I sit I realize
    I wish you now were by my side

    I don't expect you to come back
    but still I wish that you would do
    So I get up to wild the parties
    to avoid my thoughts of you

    I don't know what I'll become some day
    But I'm sure it's going to be fine
    So i better go out drinking
    instead of wasting time by thinking
    about you


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    Das hab ich jetzt auf die Schnelle gefunden, ansonsten find ich den Text sehr schön. Wie wirds denn musikalisch werden?
     
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    Erstellt: 27.03.08   #3
    And now I'm sitting in the parlor
    had too much alcohol last night
    and as I sit I realize
    I wish you now were by my side
    i wish you were by my side ,,,,,,ich wuerd das now einfach rausstreichen, denn ansonsten muesste es nach hinten "i wish you were by my side"

    I don't expect you to come back
    but still I wish that you would do
    ohne "do"...eigentlich auch ohne "that"
    So I get up to wild the parties
    to avoid my thoughts of you
    hier waere escape besser als avoid

    ansonsten schliess ich mich meinungstechnisch an, ich finds auch gut
     
  4. Knallekalle

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    Erstellt: 27.03.08   #4
    Vielen Dank für die Antworten und Verbesserungsvorschläge! :)

    Musikalisch hatte ich es mir ein bisschen schwungvoll und nur in Begleitung einer Akustik-Gitarre vorgestellt. Werds wohl heute mal aufnehmen und aufladen!

    Gruß
     
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