Nächster Song.... "Reward"

[TheRockXXL]

Nächster Song von mir... Mal sehen was ihr davon haltet?^^

„reward“

(are you satisfied?)
are you lucky with your dirty money?
earned through crime and threats
so the tramps are former lucky guys
you gave them your deserved fine
so you could stay on your line
Where the law has a little gap
You hide to take another lap

And now you gonna get what you deserve!
(Yeah! Run and hide!)
You’ll be found and get spoken…
Guilty for treason!
Out of many fucking reasons!
For taking lives and spending death…
You’ll get holidays in prison next to the rats!
That's ya reward!

(and it goes on)

Living in your big mansion,
Responsible for the peoples intensions.
You’re living easy, getting old,
With a heart and a mind so cold.
Do you really have no feelings?
Getting the people in front of you…
Kneeing…
In their mudd, their daily litter,
Trying just to live a little better…
(not like you!)

And now you gonna get what you deserve!
(Yeah! Run and hide!)
You’ll be found and get spoken…
Guilty for treason!
Out of many fucking reasons!
For taking lives and spending death…
You’ll get holidays in prison next to the rats!
That’s ya reward!

Yeah!
Vengeance!
Torture, broken,
Burning in hell!

Motherfucker!!!

 

[desgraca]

(are you satisfied?)
are you lucky with your dirty money?
happy statt lucky
earned through crime and threats
so the tramps are former lucky guys
you gave them your deserved fine
der satz macht keinen sinn...
you made them pay your fine
oder so meinst du denk ich
so you could stay on your line
Where the law has a little gap
You hide to take another lap
was soll die letzte zeile aussagen?

And now you gonna get what you deserve!
(Yeah! Run and hide!)
You’ll be found and get spoken…
and pronounced guilty of treason. treason ist landesverrat, dazu muss man atombomben an nordkorea verkaufen und so
Guilty for treason!
of
Out of many fucking reasons!
for so many
For taking lives and spending death…
"den tod verbringen"?
You’ll get holidays in prison next to the rats!
That's ya reward!

(and it goes on)

Living in your big mansion,
Responsible for the peoples intensions.
verantwortlich für die absichten der völker??
You’re living easy, getting old,
With a heart and a mind so cold.
Do you really have no feelings?
Getting the people in front of you…
Kneeing…
In their mud, their daily litter,
Trying just to live a little better…
(not like you!)


Yeah!
Vengeance!
Torture, broken,
broken?
Burning in hell!

Motherfucker!!!

also....ich finds nichso....ich find das thema unspektakulär, die umsetzung geht , das englisch ist ...unteres mittelmaß,,,,,ich würd noch ne runde dran feilen.

 

[TheRockXXL]

is ja auch erst die erste version.... danke für die tipps^^

 

[desgraca]

war auch net bös gemeint, man weiß hier nur immer nicht, ob das eben der erste entwurf ist oder quasi die endphase kurz vorm recorden ....gerngeschehn

 

[x-Riff]

Noch was meinen gefunden zu haben:

For taking lives and spending death…

taking lifes, imho

 

[desgraca]

http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=life


nö

 

[TheRockXXL]

lol...xD

 

[desgraca]

sorry, ich muss riff doch immer freundlich drauf hinweisen, wenn er mal wieder am verschlimmbessern ist

 

[x-Riff]

Mann bin ich doof - da soll mir doch einer mein Leben nehmen ...
Ich sollte vielleicht gänzlich das posten lassen so lange es noch Sommer und so heiß ist

 

[desgraca]

wir können uns auch aufteilen, ich schmeiß mich aufs englisch und du auf die kritik
so macht jeder das was er besser kann

 

[TheRockXXL]

lol.... das gehört ins off topic...^^

 

[TheRockXXL]

ahso und es heißt: "responsible for the people's tensions..." schreibfehler...

 

[desgraca]

roffel einfach mal intentions draus gemacht
so machts sogar sinn