Pull the trigger

[Ruttma]

So, hier mal wieder etwas neues von mir. Dieser Text ist mal komplett anders, als alles was ich jehmals hier reingestellt habe, aber irgendwie gefällt er mir auch recht gut.
Bin mal auf Kommentare, Kritik & ect. gespannt.
Ich weiß, die Verse sind irgendwie recht kurz, aber sie werden auch recht schnell gesungen. Ich denke hier kommt es vor allem auf die Musikalische untermauerung des Liedes drauf an.

[Intro]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
I was walking down the street in a lonely night, when there suddenly was that was catching my sight
[Chor]
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I felt my heartbeat race; I thought I see a chase
But all that I could see that far was blackness
[Vers]
Now I was running down along the empty streets, I swore to myself, you can hear those beats
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I was closing in on someone, and I could clearly see his gun
I stopped in an instance and I yelled
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
There I was standing right in front of him, next to him someone bleeding from his chin
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
Now we had the choice, either force or voice
I wondered what we would survive
[Vers]
Focussing my eyes on the angel of dead, I though of the options which I never had
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I surrendered my body; I knew it would be bloody
As I rammed him to the ground
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!

 

[desgraca]

So, hier mal wieder etwas neues von mir. Dieser Text ist mal komplett anders, als alles was ich jehmals hier reingestellt habe, aber irgendwie gefällt er mir auch recht gut.
Bin mal auf Kommentare, Kritik & ect. gespannt.
Ich weiß, die Verse sind irgendwie recht kurz, aber sie werden auch recht schnell gesungen. Ich denke hier kommt es vor allem auf die Musikalische untermauerung des Liedes drauf an.

[Intro]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
I was walking down the street in a lonely night, when there suddenly was that was catching my sight
when something suddenly caught my sight/eye
[Chor]
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I felt my heartbeat race; I thought I see a chase
i though i saw
But all that I could see that far was blackness
so far
besser: but as far as i could see
[Vers]
Now I was running down along the empty streets, I swore to myself, you can hear those beats
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I was closing in on someone, and I could clearly see his gun
I stopped in an instance and I yelled
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
There I was standing right in front of him, next to him someone bleeding from his chin
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
Now we had the choice, either force or voice
I wondered what we would survive
i wondered if we would survive
[Vers]
Focussing my eyes on the angel of dead,
death

I thought of the options which I never had
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I surrendered my body; I knew it would be bloody
As I rammed him to the ground
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!

 

[Ruttma]

So, hier mal wieder etwas neues von mir. Dieser Text ist mal komplett anders, als alles was ich jehmals hier reingestellt habe, aber irgendwie gefällt er mir auch recht gut.
Bin mal auf Kommentare, Kritik & ect. gespannt.
Ich weiß, die Verse sind irgendwie recht kurz, aber sie werden auch recht schnell gesungen. Ich denke hier kommt es vor allem auf die Musikalische untermauerung des Liedes drauf an.

[Intro]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
I was walking down the street in a lonely night, when there suddenly was that was catching my sight
when something suddenly caught my sight/eye - Gramatisch gesehen richtig, aber dann passt das überhaupt nicht mehr mit dem Gesangsschema Es ist einfach ein bischen zu kurz.
[Chor]
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I felt my heartbeat race; I thought I saw a chase
i though i saw - Stimmt
But as far as i could see there was blackness
so far
besser: but as far as i could see - Auch gut
[Vers]
Now I was running down along the empty streets, I swore to myself, you can hear those beats
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I was closing in on someone, and I could clearly see his gun
I stopped in an instance and I yelled
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
There I was standing right in front of him, next to him someone bleeding from his chin
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
Now we had the choice, either force or voice
I wondered which would make us survive
i wondered if we would survive - Ja..Ne..Es geht darum, welches der beiden Optionen das überleben sichert. Die Gewalt oder die Worte.
Geht das neue denn wenigstens, bin mir da grade selber nicht so sicher.
[Vers]
Focussing my eyes on the angel of death,
death - klar..

I thought of the options which I never had
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I surrendered my body; I knew it would be bloody
As I rammed him to the ground
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!

 

[desgraca]

So, hier mal wieder etwas neues von mir. Dieser Text ist mal komplett anders, als alles was ich jehmals hier reingestellt habe, aber irgendwie gefällt er mir auch recht gut.
Bin mal auf Kommentare, Kritik & ect. gespannt.
Ich weiß, die Verse sind irgendwie recht kurz, aber sie werden auch recht schnell gesungen. Ich denke hier kommt es vor allem auf die Musikalische untermauerung des Liedes drauf an.

[Intro]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
I was walking down the street in a lonely night, when there suddenly was that was catching my sight
when something suddenly caught my sight/eye - Gramatisch gesehen richtig, aber dann passt das überhaupt nicht mehr mit dem Gesangsschema Es ist einfach ein bischen zu kurz.
kann ich schon verstehen, aber es macht auch im vergleich zum ursprungssatz unglaublich viel sinn
vielleicht:
when i suddenly saw something that (instantly) caught my eye
[Chor]
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I felt my heartbeat race; I thought I saw a chase
i thought i saw - Stimmt
But as far as i could see there was blackness
so far
besser: but as far as i could see - Auch gut
[Vers]
Now I was running down along the empty streets, I swore to myself, you can hear those beats
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I was closing in on someone, and I could clearly see his gun
I stopped in an instance and I yelled
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
[Vers]
There I was standing right in front of him, next to him someone bleeding from his chin
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
Now we had the choice, either force or voice
I wondered which would make us survive
i wondered if we would survive - Ja..Ne..Es geht darum, welches der beiden Optionen das überleben sichert. Die Gewalt oder die Worte.
Geht das neue denn wenigstens, bin mir da grade selber nicht so sicher.
yep, so hauts hin.
[Vers]
Focussing my eyes on the angel of death,
death - klar..

I thought of the options which I never had
[Woooohow]
[Bridge]
I surrendered my body; I knew it would be bloody
As I rammed him to the ground
[Refrain]
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me down!
Hey bitch, pull the trigger, just shoot, shoot me to the ground!

 

[Ruttma]

[Vers]
I was walking down the street in a lonely night, when I suddenly saw something that cought my sight
when something suddenly caught my sight/eye - Gramatisch gesehen richtig, aber dann passt das überhaupt nicht mehr mit dem Gesangsschema Es ist einfach ein bischen zu kurz.
kann ich schon verstehen, aber es macht auch im vergleich zum ursprungssatz unglaublich viel sinn
vielleicht:
when i suddenly saw something that (instantly) caught my eye
So ist das gut. Kleine Mixture aus beiden Vorschlägen. Danke soweit.

 

[desgraca]

bidde, gerngeschehn