The beauty of the heart

[Maddi]

Hallo und einen schönen guten Nachmittag euch allen:

Hier mein neustes Werk:

The beauty of the heart

Outside the window he sees nothing
nothing but a fucked up world
all of his anger and sadness he cant forget
the resistence from deep inside
Yelling out why oh why

Are the leading parts of my thoughts
always summizing with my anger?
Is the world that I left behind
the Insanity of my mind?

He opens the window again taking a peek
out of his superficial life
they are fake, so is he
to understand him honestly
just listen to his words:

I hate
I hate myself for doing this

I hate
I hate myself

I blinded by beauty
but how can that be
I'm am already blind
I can feel a persons soul
so I judge by the beauty of the heart
inside

Are the leading parts of my thoughts
always summizing with my anger?
Is the world that I left behind
the Insanity of my mind?

I am blinded by a persons beauty
the beauty of a heart inside
Something lets me loose my mind
the beauty of a heart inside.

 

[desgraca]

Outside the window he sees nothing
nothing but a fucked up world
all of his anger and sadness he cant forget
the resistence from deep inside
da wird nicht klar, ob sich das "he cant forget" auf das davor bezieht oder auf die folgende zeile
Yelling out why oh why

Are the leading parts of my thoughts
always summizing with my anger?
summize is mir nich bekannt
Is the world that I left behind
the Insanity of my mind?

He opens the window again taking a peek
to take a look...beyond his superficial life
out of his superficial life
they are fake, so is he
to understand him honestly
just listen to his words:

I hate
I hate myself for doing this

I hate
I hate myself

I blinded by beauty
i'm
but how can that be
I'm am already blind
I can feel a persons soul
so I judge by the beauty of the heart
inside

Are the leading parts of my thoughts
always summizing with my anger?
Is the world that I left behind
the Insanity of my mind?

I am blinded by a persons beauty
the beauty of a heart inside
Something lets me loose my mind
makes me lose my mind
the beauty of a heart inside.

finde deine idee ganz süß, finde nur, dass der zusammenhang zu dem thema in den ersten beiden strophen noch nich wirklich klar wird

 

[x-Riff]

Hier ist noch was:

I'm am already blind

Entweder I´m oder I am - I´m am ist doppelt gemoppelt.

Bei dem he und dem I handelt es sich um die selbe Person - nur einmal aus der Außenperspektive und einmal aus der Innenperspektive betrachtet?

 

[Maddi]

Hier ist noch was:

Entweder I´m oder I am - I´m am ist doppelt gemoppelt.

Bei dem he und dem I handelt es sich um die selbe Person - nur einmal aus der Außenperspektive und einmal aus der Innenperspektive betrachtet?

Ja," I'm am "war ein blöder Schreibfehler.
Das "he" und "I" sind die dieselbe Person.

 

[x-Riff]

Dann stell doch mal eine neue Version rein - so viel war es ja nicht an Anmerkungen