Verbesserung Strophe 1

[Robbie2006]

Bitte bessert aus was es zu verbessern gibt!

Can you remember on the first day?
The sun shined all the way thru night and day
Dreamed youthful dreams in and oldfashioned way
I'm so scared that it will slip away

 

[desgraca]

Can you remember on the first day?
The sun shined all the way thru night and day
shone statt shined
Dreamed youthful dreams in and oldfashioned way
I'm so scared that it will slip away


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