Emotionaler Text (English)

von RAF-MANN, 28.01.07.

  1. RAF-MANN

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    Erstellt: 28.01.07   #1
    Heay Leute hab einen TExt geschrieben ,der sehr persönlich ist. Naja ich wollt aber einpaar Verbesserungsvorschläge hören. Ich bin noch etwas Unsicher mit den Text, ob das alles so richitg ist. Bin nämlich nicht der Beste in Englisch ,schreibe aber total gerne in der Sprache ,da die Laute mir viel mehr gefallen als im Deutschen . Also hier ist :rolleyes:

    Lying here
    Ican´t fall asleep
    I crave for you
    I wanna move out of here

    This thought in my head wanna lying in your bed
    Next to you feeling your breath
    Kiss your lips they taste so sweet
    Wispering in my ear say all the things i wanna hear
    Say you love me and my smile starts
    Now hold me tight we're losing our fear


    I love the moments with you and me
    All the feelings taking over me
    I found a safe place by your side
    And I´m lost without you
    So I need you tonight

    All the things that will happen in this night
    I´ll keep them on my mind
    You´re my special girl
    I love everything you do
    It´s so great It can´t be true
    Damn I realize I´m changing

    I love the moments with you and me
    All the feelings taking over me
    I found a safe place by your side
    And I´m lost without you
    So I need you tonight

    After you came I wasn't the same anymore
    You changed my life in just one scond
    In the past I was alone ,roamed down the road
    Now I sing that you´re the one who saved me


    I love the moment with you and me
    All the feelings take over me
    I find a safe place by your side
    and I lost without you
    so I need you tonight


    I love the moments with you and me
    (After you came I wasn't the same)
    All the feelings taking over me
    (you changed my life)
    I found a safe place by your side ´
    (In the past I was alone )
    and I´m lost without you
    (
    Now I sing that you the one who saved me )
    so I need you tonight


    I love the moments with you and me
    (After you came I wasn't the same)
    All the feelings taking over me
    (you changed my life)
    I found a safe place by your side ´
    (In the past I was alone )
    and I´m lost without you
    (
    Now I sing that you the one who saved me )
    so I need you tonight

    Das in den Klammern wird von einer zweiten Stimme versetzt zur ersten Stimme gesungen ....
    schon mal Danke im Vorraus
     
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    kann niemand was zu sagen =(
     
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    Lying here
    I can´t fall asleep
    I crave for you
    besser: I'm craving (damits zur oberen zeit passt)
    I wanna move out of here

    This thought in my head wanna lying in your bed
    -wanna lie in your bed
    Next to you feeling your breath
    Kiss your lips they taste so sweet
    Whispering in my ear say all the things i wanna hear
    entweder: wispering in my ear you say
    oder whisper in my ear -say all the things i wanna hear
    oder
    tell me all the things i wanna hear

    Say you love me and my smile starts
    mein lächeln beginnt,,,,,,,hm,,,,besser ,,i start smiling, start to smile
    Now hold me tight we’re losing our fear


    I love the moments with you and me
    das "moments with you and me"überzeugt mich noch nicht,....
    was hältst du von "these moments with you"

    All the feelings taking over me
    I found a safe place by your side
    And I´m lost without you
    So I need you tonight

    All the things that will happen in this night
    lieber tonight statt in this night, oder this night (ohne in)
    I´ll keep them on my mind
    You´re my special girl
    I love everything you do
    It´s so great It can´t be true
    Damn I realize I´m changing


    After you came I wasn’t the same anymore
    hm,,,,,came,,,,ja lass stehn:D vielleicht came into my life, und dafür hinten das anymore weg?
    You changed my life in just one scond
    In the past I was alone ,roamed down the road
    Now I sing that you´re the one who saved me
    hm,,,wilbour würde dir hier ein "I'm singing" reinmachen, ich lass es mal stehen:D


     
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    Erstellt: 28.01.07   #4
    HEay vielen Dank für deine Hilfe ;ich hab einige Sachen übernommen ... man sieht halt seine eigenen Fehler nie...
    Ich hab noch rumgestöbert und ein ganz alten Text ausgepackt . war immer mein Sorgenkind hab immer etwas gebastelt aber nie Schlauer draus geworden

    Save Me
    verse :
    So today i wanna say so much things how i feel
    I made it my way and wrote this letter ,
    Would you understand it better ?
    I remeber our dates , the first time i look in your eyes,deep inside
    Another once i tried to touche your hand
    And the last i kissed your lips
    After that I regret , ´cause you said your not sure how we make

    prechorus:
    Babe you dont show me ,but i wanna know ,
    Is your heart still beating or the last feeling leaving ?
    I hope for better
    And i think all time how i cought make you see that we belong together ,
    But i cant wait forever .

    chorus:
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
    why you let me waiting ?
    PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
    it ´s like beeing shake..
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!

    verse:
    So much time,just wasting my time
    And keep on waiting for you like everyday i do ,but nothing ever happens
    I hope the day would be through to start new
    And i try to stop thinking,but i need you
    Like the greatest passion
    Yes I do I do


    prechorus:
    Babe you dont show me ,but i wanna know ,
    Is your heart still beating or the last feeling leaving ?
    I hope for better
    And i think all time how i cought make you see that we belong together ,
    But i cant wait forever .


    chorus:
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
    why you let me waiting ?
    PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
    it ´s like beeing shake..
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
    ( SOLO )

    bridge :
    So much time is through and i always been running for you
    My feelings blind me and foul
    I always tell you the truth ,but now i want it from you

    chorus:
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVe ME!!
    why you let me waiting ?
    PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
    it ´s like beeing shake..
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!




    also an einigen stellen hab ich keine ahnung ob das gramatikalisch geht
    woltle halt irgendwie das ausdrücken ^^
     
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    dann les ich da auch nochmal kurz drüber..


    Save Me
    verse :
    So today i wanna say so much things how i feel
    so many things about how i feel
    I made it my way and wrote this letter ,
    i did it my way
    Would you understand it better ?
    öh, warum jetzt konjunktiv?
    I remember our dates , the first time i look in your eyes,deep inside
    the first time i looked into your eyes
    Another once i tried to touch your hand
    another time
    And the last i kissed your lips
    and last time
    After that I regret , ´cause you said your not sure how we make
    regretted/felt regret
    how we make? was versuchst du zu sagen? if we make a good match?
    prechorus:
    Babe you dont show me ,but i wanna know ,
    Is your heart still beating or the last feeling leaving ?
    würde ich hinten das "is" nochmal wiederholen "or is the last feeling leaving"
    I hope for better
    i hope for the better
    And i think all time how i cought make you see that we belong together ,
    and i think/wonder all the time how i could make
    But i cant wait forever .

    chorus:
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
    why you let me waiting ?
    wait
    PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
    it ´s like beeing shake..
    shaken
    YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!

    verse:
    So much time,just wasting my time
    And keep on waiting for you like everyday i do ,but nothing ever happens
    das "i do",,,,,,,ist mir schon klar, dass das eine absichtlich andere wortstellung ist aber ich glaub ich würde doch eins von den beiden hier vorziehen:
    and i keep on waiting for you like every day, i do
    oder
    and i do keep on waiting for you like every day

    I hope the day would be through to start new
    i wish the day was/were through/over
    And i try to stop thinking,but i need you
    Like the greatest passion
    Yes I do I do



    bridge :
    So much time is through and i always been running for you
    My feelings blind me and foul
    and foul? hmm...
    I always tell you the truth ,but now i want it from you
    evtl lieber nochmal: but now i want the truth from you
     
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