Emotionaler Text (English)

[RAF-MANN]

Heay Leute hab einen TExt geschrieben ,der sehr persönlich ist. Naja ich wollt aber einpaar Verbesserungsvorschläge hören. Ich bin noch etwas Unsicher mit den Text, ob das alles so richitg ist. Bin nämlich nicht der Beste in Englisch ,schreibe aber total gerne in der Sprache ,da die Laute mir viel mehr gefallen als im Deutschen . Also hier ist

Lying here
Ican´t fall asleep
I crave for you
I wanna move out of here

This thought in my head wanna lying in your bed
Next to you feeling your breath
Kiss your lips they taste so sweet
Wispering in my ear say all the things i wanna hear
Say you love me and my smile starts
Now hold me tight we're losing our fear


I love the moments with you and me
All the feelings taking over me
I found a safe place by your side
And I´m lost without you
So I need you tonight

All the things that will happen in this night
I´ll keep them on my mind
You´re my special girl
I love everything you do
It´s so great It can´t be true
Damn I realize I´m changing

I love the moments with you and me
All the feelings taking over me
I found a safe place by your side
And I´m lost without you
So I need you tonight

After you came I wasn't the same anymore
You changed my life in just one scond
In the past I was alone ,roamed down the road
Now I sing that you´re the one who saved me


I love the moment with you and me
All the feelings take over me
I find a safe place by your side
and I lost without you
so I need you tonight


I love the moments with you and me
(After you came I wasn't the same)
All the feelings taking over me
(you changed my life)
I found a safe place by your side ´
(In the past I was alone )
and I´m lost without you
(Now I sing that you the one who saved me )
so I need you tonight


I love the moments with you and me
(After you came I wasn't the same)
All the feelings taking over me
(you changed my life)
I found a safe place by your side ´
(In the past I was alone )
and I´m lost without you
(Now I sing that you the one who saved me )
so I need you tonight

Das in den Klammern wird von einer zweiten Stimme versetzt zur ersten Stimme gesungen ....
schon mal Danke im Vorraus

 

[RAF-MANN]

kann niemand was zu sagen =(

 

[desgraca]

Lying here
I can´t fall asleep
I crave for you
besser: I'm craving (damits zur oberen zeit passt)
I wanna move out of here

This thought in my head wanna lying in your bed
-wanna lie in your bed
Next to you feeling your breath
Kiss your lips they taste so sweet
Whispering in my ear say all the things i wanna hear
entweder: wispering in my ear you say
oder whisper in my ear -say all the things i wanna hear
oder
tell me all the things i wanna hear
Say you love me and my smile starts
mein lächeln beginnt,,,,,,,hm,,,,besser ,,i start smiling, start to smile
Now hold me tight we’re losing our fear


I love the moments with you and me
das "moments with you and me"überzeugt mich noch nicht,....
was hältst du von "these moments with you"
All the feelings taking over me
I found a safe place by your side
And I´m lost without you
So I need you tonight

All the things that will happen in this night
lieber tonight statt in this night, oder this night (ohne in)
I´ll keep them on my mind
You´re my special girl
I love everything you do
It´s so great It can´t be true
Damn I realize I´m changing


After you came I wasn’t the same anymore
hm,,,,,came,,,,ja lass stehn vielleicht came into my life, und dafür hinten das anymore weg?
You changed my life in just one scond
In the past I was alone ,roamed down the road
Now I sing that you´re the one who saved me
hm,,,wilbour würde dir hier ein "I'm singing" reinmachen, ich lass es mal stehen

 

[RAF-MANN]

HEay vielen Dank für deine Hilfe ;ich hab einige Sachen übernommen ... man sieht halt seine eigenen Fehler nie...
Ich hab noch rumgestöbert und ein ganz alten Text ausgepackt . war immer mein Sorgenkind hab immer etwas gebastelt aber nie Schlauer draus geworden

Save Me
verse :
So today i wanna say so much things how i feel
I made it my way and wrote this letter ,
Would you understand it better ?
I remeber our dates , the first time i look in your eyes,deep inside
Another once i tried to touche your hand
And the last i kissed your lips
After that I regret , ´cause you said your not sure how we make

prechorus:
Babe you dont show me ,but i wanna know ,
Is your heart still beating or the last feeling leaving ?
I hope for better
And i think all time how i cought make you see that we belong together ,
But i cant wait forever .

chorus:
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
why you let me waiting ?
PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
it ´s like beeing shake..
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!

verse:
So much time,just wasting my time
And keep on waiting for you like everyday i do ,but nothing ever happens
I hope the day would be through to start new
And i try to stop thinking,but i need you
Like the greatest passion
Yes I do I do


prechorus:
Babe you dont show me ,but i wanna know ,
Is your heart still beating or the last feeling leaving ?
I hope for better
And i think all time how i cought make you see that we belong together ,
But i cant wait forever .


chorus:
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
why you let me waiting ?
PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
it ´s like beeing shake..
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
( SOLO )

bridge :
So much time is through and i always been running for you
My feelings blind me and foul
I always tell you the truth ,but now i want it from you

chorus:
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVe ME!!
why you let me waiting ?
PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
it ´s like beeing shake..
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!




also an einigen stellen hab ich keine ahnung ob das gramatikalisch geht
woltle halt irgendwie das ausdrücken ^^

 

[desgraca]

dann les ich da auch nochmal kurz drüber..


Save Me
verse :
So today i wanna say so much things how i feel
so many things about how i feel
I made it my way and wrote this letter ,
i did it my way
Would you understand it better ?
öh, warum jetzt konjunktiv?
I remember our dates , the first time i look in your eyes,deep inside
the first time i looked into your eyes
Another once i tried to touch your hand
another time
And the last i kissed your lips
and last time
After that I regret , ´cause you said your not sure how we make
regretted/felt regret
how we make? was versuchst du zu sagen? if we make a good match?
prechorus:
Babe you dont show me ,but i wanna know ,
Is your heart still beating or the last feeling leaving ?
würde ich hinten das "is" nochmal wiederholen "or is the last feeling leaving"
I hope for better
i hope for the better
And i think all time how i cought make you see that we belong together ,
and i think/wonder all the time how i could make
But i cant wait forever .

chorus:
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!
why you let me waiting ?
wait
PLEASE SAVE ME!!! dont you know i´m breaking ?
it ´s like beeing shake..
shaken
YOU DIRVE ME CRAZY !!! AND ONLY YOU CAN SAVE ME!!

verse:
So much time,just wasting my time
And keep on waiting for you like everyday i do ,but nothing ever happens
das "i do",,,,,,,ist mir schon klar, dass das eine absichtlich andere wortstellung ist aber ich glaub ich würde doch eins von den beiden hier vorziehen:
and i keep on waiting for you like every day, i do
oder
and i do keep on waiting for you like every day
I hope the day would be through to start new
i wish the day was/were through/over
And i try to stop thinking,but i need you
Like the greatest passion
Yes I do I do



bridge :
So much time is through and i always been running for you
My feelings blind me and foul
and foul? hmm...
I always tell you the truth ,but now i want it from you
evtl lieber nochmal: but now i want the truth from you