Girl with no name

[sepia-toned]

Inspiriert durch was auch immer, spontane Idee
Kritisiert mich...bitte!!!



Girl with no name

She smiles for me when she walks out the door
I can't see, but I can tell from the way that she walks
And it makes me sad I don't know her name
But I'm not doughty and she never talks

She comes here once in a while
And I'd wait a billion years and longer
Just to see her eyes once more
To know it's not a dream

She comes and goes
And stays a while
Arrives and leaves
And makes me smile

She says hello
She says goodbye
And when she leaves
It makes me cry

She looks at me and I catch my breath
'Cause she busily taking my breath away
And whenever I wait a week in vain
I hope she'll arrive another day

'Cause She comes here once in a while
And I'd wait a billion years and longer
Just to see her eyes once more
To know it's not a dream

She comes and leaves
And saves my day
Her eyes can take
My breath away

She says hello
She says goodbye
She'll never know
It makes me cry

 

[desgraca]

Girl with no name

She smiles for me when she walks out the door
I can't see, but I can tell from the way that she walks
du bist blind? ansonsten i cant see it
And it makes me sad I don't know her name
But I'm not doughty and she never talks

She comes here once in a while
And I'd wait a billion years and longer
Just to see her eyes once more
To know it's not a dream

She comes and goes
And stays a while
Arrives and leaves
And makes me smile

She says hello
She says goodbye
And when she leaves
It makes me cry

She looks at me and I catch my breath
'Cause she busily taking my breath away
cause she's busy (at) taking my breath away
And whenever I wait a week in vain
i've waited another week in vain
I hope she'll arrive another day

'Cause She comes here once in a while
And I'd wait a billion years and longer
Just to see her eyes once more
To know it's not a dream

She comes and leaves
And saves my day
Her eyes can take
My breath away

She says hello
She says goodbye
She'll never know
It makes me cry

also so ganz viel inhalt find ich da irgendwie nich, ich versteh nichmal, warum sie einerseits dauernd laechelt wenn du ihr begegnest und sie andererseits aber scheinbar verschollen is,,,? dass man sowas eher simpel haelt find ich aber prinzipiell nisch schlecht

 

[x-Riff]

Hi sepia,
da kann ich mich nate anschließen ... sind mir zu viele wiederholungen drin - für eine momentaufnahme (gilr gesehen - tolles lächeln - schon is sie wieder weg - sehe ich sie wieder?) ist es somit zu lang - für ein kleines drama (immer kommt sie und lächelt - aber dann geht sie wieder als wäre nix geschehen - und beim nächsten mal isses genau so) ist mir dann zuwenig bewegung drin - es wird vor allem überhaupt nicht klar, warum das lyrische ich die nicht anspricht (das heißt: die ganze Innen- und damit Gefühlswelt bleibt völlig außen vor) ... irgendwie bleibt für mich sowas wie eine sehr lange besprechung von einem polaroid-foto ...

x-Riff