Grammatik richtig?!

[I-Don't-Care]

hi all,

könnte mir vllt jmd die Grammatik von unserem eigenen Song verbessern.
Ich denke da gibt es ein paar Fehler.

Wäre sehr nett!!!


Haut rein

Sleeping Lives

Some people say live brings everyday new exiting things
But I don’t see them at all
I wake up and it’s like a déjà-vu
It seem like the world has stopped to spin

I go out and try to life my day
But it doesn’t feel so
It more feel like life is living me
We have to get out of this daily grind

Because we mainly do the same
I’m tired of this old shit
We have to change our fuckin ways
We need new shit to keep our lives awake

We walk the street down like soulless undead
Beaten out from our instinct
We have to let out the fucking madness
Which sleeps deep in our hearts

At last we all need to be what we really are
Listen up it’s the only way out
So go and break down the walls
And run on the otherside to your goddamn live


Because we mainly do the same
I’m tired of this old shit
We have to change our ways
We need new shit to keep our live awake

 

[Banjo]

hi all,

könnte mir vllt jmd die Grammatik von unserem eigenen Song verbessern.
Ich denke da gibt es ein paar Fehler.

Wäre sehr nett!!!


Haut rein

Sleeping Lives

Some people say live brings new exiting things every day
But I don't see them at all
I wake up and it's like a déjà-vu
It seem like the world has stopped spinning

I go out and try to live my day
But it doesn't feel so
It feels more like life is living me
We have to get out of this daily grind

Because we mainly do the same ?? Was meinst Du mit mainly
I'm tired of this old shit
We have to change our fuckin ways
We need new shit to keep our lives awake

We walk the street down like soulless undead
Beaten out from our instinct
We have to let out the fucking madness
Which sleeps deep in our hearts

At last we all need to be what we really are
Listen up it's the only way out
So go and break down the walls
And run on the other side to your goddamn live


Because we mainly do the same
I'm tired of this old shit
We have to change our ways
We need new shit to keep our live awake

Banjo