hoi leutz, ich bin ja eigentlich kein Sänger, aber der Thread hier scheint mir perfekt um meine selbst geschriebenen Texten zu posten. Ich würd gerne mal n paar meinungen von euch hören (Kritik - Lob - Tipps etc.) Meine fragen an euch : sind n paar sachen vllt übertrieben?versteht man manche textzeilen net? gibs irgendwo keine sinnvollen gedankenverknüpfungen? oda sowas in der art... n kleine frage am rande: findet ihr, der text passt zu ner Metal-/Emocore-Band?könnt ja eure antworten vllt begründen... Obsession Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you you wrote many letters in ev'ry letter you told me,how much you love me you told me 'bout your life and about your fetters so tell me,why i should be there In a dark cold night you told me about your pain about your cries in ev'ry night all these morbid thoughts in your brain so tell me why i should be the light tell me why i should help you Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you kissin' your lips on a sunny day kissin' your lips by a sunny way suddenly there was a storm in your brain all these morbid thoughts all these stupid words you said so tell me why i should help you ev'ry day you told me about your wounds ev'ry minute this pain inside my head you couldn't cross your bounds tell me where i should take the new power for you Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you I couldn't believe this you show me all your lesions in this second I have lost my bliss you told me about your obsession tell me why you do all these things suddenly you don't tell me something you don't spend one word for me all this ignorance to me so tell me why you love nothing so tell me why i should love you Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you danke mfg
Obsession Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance towards me ...wobei das auch noch nich optimal ist...hm... tell me why i should be there for you you wrote many letters in ev'ry letter you told me how much you love me you told me 'bout your life and about your fetters so tell me why i should be there In a dark cold night you told me about your pain about your cries ev'ry night all these morbid thoughts on your (brain) mind so tell me why i should be the light tell me why i should help you Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you kissin' your lips on a sunny day kissin' your lips by a sunny way suddenly there was a storm in your brain all these morbid thoughts all these stupid words you said so tell me why i should help you ev'ry day you told me about your wounds ev'ry minute this pain inside my head you couldn't cross your bounds also, erstens, cross your bounds sagt man nicht, zweitens, bounds und wounds, das reimt sich nich tell me where from i should take the new power for you bzw. from where Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you I couldn't believe this you show me all your lesions this second I have lost my bliss you told me about your obsession tell me why you do all these things suddenly you don't tell me something you don't spend one word on me all this ignorance towards/against me so tell me why you love nothing so tell me why i should love you Refr.: tell me why i should love you tell me why i should kiss you all this ignorance to me tell me why i should be there for you hm ok,,,,also hier stört mich irgendwie, dass es alles sehr sehr einfach gehalten ist, und dann immermal ein wort reinkommt, was klingt als wäre es dir aus dem wörterbuch entgegengeflogen, also eine ganz andere sprachliche ebene halt. naja, kann man aber wohl nicht ändern, hängt ja einfach auch immer mit den englischkenntnissen zusammen. was ich irgendwie bis jetzt bei allen texten finde, die dann so in die emocore richtung gehen sollen- du redest immer von den fehlern anderer leute und deren problemen und deinen problemen mit ihnen... emo ist irgendwie meistens introspektiver,,,,,,aber das ist wiederum geschmackssache.
